I'd be happy to cast an eye over it. I can't guarantee I'll catch every canon-timeline quirk, but I'd be happy to look over it as Saiyuki-in-character and as plot-pacing-etc. My email is lisa underscore bee at livejournal dot com.

Oh, and enclose a note telling me how harsh I can be: I tend to be a, mmm, enthusiastic commenter, and I'm not always terribly tactful.